T1+Writing

tuesday 6 april 2011

WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to persuade people to visit the Bay of Plenty.

Success Criteria My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

“Do you want to visit the best place in the world” Well if you do all you have to do is go to the bay of plenty where you will be feeling great. Join in the fun with activities such as the karanghake gorge, climbing the mount or even the mounts main beach.

Located just out side of waihi. The karanghake gorge is a beautiful place where you can walk and enjoy the sites. You will also get some excises it is the most beautiful place to visit so that is just one of the most fun things to do when you arrive here.You just have to do this

Located in the mount. Here is a thing you just have to try that is climbing the mount. You can take a walk up it or around it walking up it you will enjoy the sites and excises and fresh air. So this another thing the at you have to do. Walking around the mount is very shady so you can walk and stay cool it also looks cool looking at the water as you walk past it.

Located under the mount.The mounts main beach is a fun place where you can relax or go for a swim in the water. Also around the beach there will be a walk way where you can go along it and get to whale island there you can find a patch of rocks and that is called the blow hole there when the water hits it the water will spray up in the air.

So those were my reasons Karanghake gorge, mount and mount main beach. So there you have it those are my reason that tell you why you should visit the bay of plenty and why it is the the best country in the world.

A great piece of writing Quintin, well done. You have made excellent progress here. You have used paragraphs correctly, you can now focus on linking these paragraphs e.g. my first reason, secondly, finally, another reason...... You have stated your 3 reasons in your introduction and then restated them in your conclusion, well done. Your paragraphs would benefit from a bit more detail though. You are beginning to use stronger imperatives to help convince me. Now try to include rhetorical questions also. Miss Crone :)